Energy Production IELTS Writing Task 1

Energy Production IELTS Writing Task 1

Visual Data: Noun

/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data adopted from actual IELTS Test in November, 2017

Instructions:

The pie charts below show the comparison of various types of energy production in France in two years.

Write a report that compares the different portions of energy production displayed in the two pie charts.

LELB Society’s Student: Sasan

The charts demonstrate the amount((The word “quantity” fits better.)) of energy produced by various materials((You could also mention the four variables here, including coal, gas, nuclear, and petro.)) in France in 1995 and 2005. Generally, in 2005, the amounts of all materials increased for producing energy except for petro.

In details((in detail)), 29.8% of energy was produced by coal((from coal or by using/burning coal)) in 1995, however it rose((it faintly rose)) to 30.93% in 2005. Also, there was the same trend in using nuclear energy at 6.4% and 10.1% in 1995 and 2005 in turn. Moreover, the usage of gas increased as well, from 29.63% in 1995 to 30.31% in 2005. Furthermore, petro((petro,)) which was one of the main resources((energy resources)), experienced a decline((a big / significant decline)) from 29.27% to 19.55%. Finally, in 1995, 4.9% of energy was originated from other resources and it increased to 9.1% in 2005.

Examiner’s Notes:

• Visual Data: Noun

  /ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
  group noun [U]
  information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
  The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>Data Analysis:

  • Except your second sentence, you’ve almost never tried to analyze the visual data. For instance, you could write: France has attempted to diversify its energy resources almost twice over this decade.
• Choice of Words (Diction): Excellent
• Coherence: Great
• Cohesion: Great
• Grammar: Great
• Reasoning (noun)
  /ˈriː.zən.ɪŋ/ noun [U] the deep process of speculation and reflection on something for making a decision: There doesn’t seem to be any logical reasoning behind the decision that has been made.“>Reasoning: Needs improvement.
• Word Count: “120” Insufficient number of words!

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