[Dr. Mohammad Hossein Hariri Asl]

Analysis and scoring

Cohesion and coherence: 15 of 25%

• You need to use more conjunctions in your essay. Study this post on English conjunctions.
• The format or structure of your essay requires refinement, especially the length of paragraphs.

Grammatical range and accuracy: 15 of 25%

1. It’s –> it is a fact
2. it happened to us
3. different from
4. there is some correlation
5. Don’t use “although & but” together.
6. adult life = adulthood
7. needs –> need
8. good grades
9. as students
10. they reach a point
11. insight into

Lexical resources: 20 of 25%

• You’re using more academic and formal vocabulary. Congratulations!

Task achievement: 18 of 25%

• Your 1st paragraph is not a standard introductory paragraph. It lacks a clear topic sentence.
• Your second paragraph makes a better choice for introductory paragraph.
• Your third paragraph is supporting your stance very well.

Spelling: Good

Punctuation: Needs improvement

Word count: “298” Excellent

Time on Essay Writing: XX of 40 minutes

• Not mentioned!!

Band score: 6.5 of 9