Analysis and scoring
Cohesion and coherence: 15 of 25%
- You need to use more conjunctions in your essay. Study this post on English conjunctions.
- The format or structure of your essay requires refinement, especially the length of paragraphs.
Grammatical range and accuracy: 15 of 25%
- It’s –> it is a fact
- it happened to us
- different from
- there is some correlation
- Don’t use “although & but” together.
- adult life = adulthood
- needs –> need
- good grades
- as students
- they reach a point
- insight into
Lexical resources: 20 of 25%
- You’re using more academic and formal vocabulary. Congratulations!
Task achievement: 18 of 25%
- Your 1st paragraph is not a standard introductory paragraph. It lacks a clear topic sentence.
- Your second paragraph makes a better choice for introductory paragraph.
- Your third paragraph is supporting your stance very well.
Spelling: Good
Punctuation: Needs improvement
Word count: “298” Excellent
Time on Essay Writing: XX of 40 minutes
- Not mentioned!!
Band score: 6.5 of 9