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The diagram above illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the construction industry.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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IELTS Writing Task 1 on manufacturing bricks process
This picture illustrates the process of making and manufacturing bricks out of clay. As it is evident, the process has six steps and it is simple and clear.
- Diagram is much better than picture for this context.
At first, the clays are collected by a digger. Those clays are called mental grids and they will be put on a roller and they will add some water and sand to them. In the next step, there are two choices to make the material into the shape of a brick. It is done whether by a cutter or a mould. Then the brick-shaped material will be sent to a dying oven for one day to two days (24h-48h).
- Clay is uncountable.
- with a digger – with a tool or instrument / by an agent
- metal grids
- they = it (collected clay)
- will be = is (not shift of tense in the process)
- the collected clay is scattered over / across a metal grid and compressed with a roller
- In the next stage, some water and sand are added to the clay. Who is ‘they’? Use passive voice.
- it is done = this task is completed or something else which is more formal
- whether by = either by
- by a cutter = with a wire cutter
- It’s better to write: the raw bricks are heated in a drying oven for a day or two.
- dying oven = drying oven
In the next step, the dyed bricks will be sent to a kiln at a very high temperature, first at a moderate degree (from 200C to 980C) and then higher (from 870C to 1300C). Consequently, they will be sent to a cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days (48h-72h). In the last step, the bricks will be packed and they are ready for delivery.
- dried bricks
- will be = are
- and get ready for delivery
Analysis and scoring
- Analysis
- Overall, the report has not been written with precision.
- Cohesion and coherence: 18 of 25%
- Grammatical range and accuracy: 12 of 25%
- Lexical resources: 14 of 25%
- Task achievement: 17 of 25%
- Spelling: Average
- Punctuation: Good
- Word Count: “171 Words” – Excellent
- Time on Report Writing: “ 20 Minutes” – Great
- Band score: 5.5 of 9
time spent on the writing: 20 minutes
Thank you for mentioning the spent time.
This picture illustrates the process of making and manufacturing bricks out of clay. As it is evident, the process has six steps and it is simple and clear.
At first, the clays are collected by a digger. Those clays are called mental grids and they will be put on a roller and they will add some water and sand to them. In the next step, there are two choices to make the material into the shape of a brick. It is done whether by a cutter or a mould. Then the brick-shaped material will be sent to a dying oven for one day to two days (24h-48h).
In the next step, the dyed bricks will be sent to a kiln at a very high temperature, first at a moderate degree (from 200C to 980C) and then higher (from 870C to 1300C). Consequently, they will be sent to a cooling chamber for 2 to 3 days (48h-72h). In the last step, the bricks will be packed and they are ready for delivery.
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