Generating Electricity IELTS Writing Task 1

IELTS Writing Task 1 LELB Society

 

Generating Electricity IELTS Writing Task 1

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Instructions:

The diagrams below show the process of generating electricity from .

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Generating Electricity IELTS Writing Task 1 LELB Society


LELB Society’s Student: Mohsen

The two pictures((diagrams)) demonstrates((demonstrate)) new energy system((a new system)) and process of generating electricity from wave power .((power.))
System structure for producting((producing)) electricity from wave power contains chamber ,((a chamber,)) turbine ,((turbine,)) cliff , electricity , air and sea wave .((wave.))
The picture a((Diagram A)) indicates when the hits the and this time input((pushes)) become((toward)) to rotation((rotate)) ((blades)) after ward((afterward)) change((changes)) to .
In picture b((Diagram B)) display((it is displayed)) when the sea wave recedes the cliff and like wise((likewise)) air flow continuous((continues)) between turbine blade .((blades.))
There was considerable production rule of sea wave.((The whose sentence is ambiguous.))
To conclude ,((To conclude,)) new energy system include((including)) ( solar(((solar)) energy , wave power energy ,
In addition , new energy system is better than process of((the process of)) generating electricity from
(oil , gas , coal , etc((etc.)) )
This energy called green energy((green.))


Examiner’s Notes:

  • Visual Data Analysis:
    • This is a and you should have focused on the detailed process of generating electricity, which you did not.
    •  There are some paragraphs that are too short.
    • Your concluding paragraph is quite irrelevant to the diagrams. In a process essay, you don’t necessarily need to write a concluding paragraph.
    • There is another short paragraph after the concluding paragraph, which is wrong.
    • You must be more careful about punctuation marks.
  • Lexical Resources (12 of 25%)
  • Task Achievement (8 of 25%)
  • Coherence and Cohesion (10 of 25%)
  • Grammatical Range & Accuracy (8 of 25%)
  • Word Count: “145” slightly below the expected number of words, i.e. “150”

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1 thought on “Generating Electricity IELTS Writing Task 1”

  1. The two pictures demonstrates new energy system and process of generating electricity from wave power .
    System structure for producting electricity from wave power contains chamber , turbine , cliff , electricity , air and sea wave .
    The picture a indicates when the sea wave hits the sea wall and this time input air flow become to rotation turbine blade after ward mechanical energy change to electrical energy .
    In picture b display when the sea wave recedes the cliff and like wise air flow continuous between turbine blade .
    There was considerable production rule of sea wave.
    To conclude , new energy system include ( solar energy , wave power energy , wind energy
    In addition , new energy system is better than process of generating electricity from fossil fuels
    (oil , gas , coal , etc )
    This energy called green energy

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