IELTS – TOEFL Preparation Course | Session 12
Topic
Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned.
Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
Today, prohibition against blood sports is a heated argument. Some want to enjoy their time, no matter how awful animals are treated. However, I personally believe that these sorts of sports should be omitted, undoubtedly.
To begin with, all creatures have the right to live freely without any harassment. To be more specific, world belongs to all humans, animals, plants, etc. and if human beings are more intelligent, it does not mean that humans can restrict others. So, blood sports are out of the question.
Blood sport is regarded as a kind of cruelty rather than a sport in today’s world. The more tendency to apply the ethical and moral issues, the more respectful view people may have towards all creatures’ rights concluding animals. Explicitly speaking, the widespread prevalence of this kind of sport generates some hostile and belligerent spirits in people which may keep them away of having amicable relationships and behaviours. Moreover, with the increased attention to the issues of conservation and preservation, the application of such sports is significantly disregarded.
In line 4, I think the right preposition is “from” instead of “of” after “away”.
You are right. Thank you.
You’re welcome.
Line 1: Blood sports are regarded as …
Line 2: view :arrow: views
Line 3: concluding :arrow: including
Line 3: animals :arrow: animals’ (show possession)
Line 3: widespread prevalence is semantically redundant.
Lines 5 and 6: what type of conservation or preservation are you talking about? Explain more.
Blood Sports are regarded…..
Blood sports are considered …. OR blood sports are regarded as …
In addition, government and individuals should consider animal rights as an essential issue in these days. I personally speculate that all blood sports are symptomatic of culture and in order to attempt to omit these sorts of sports, people should alter their culture. To conclude, in my opinion, we should pay more attention to this fact that the animals life is so important.
in line2, I think the words symptoms and symptomatic are used more for negative and problematic concepts rather than for general and positive word such as culture.
In line4, Animals’ lives are….
Also, it’s better to use the word extremely rather than so in that place.
Thank you so much.
Excellent!
Just about the use of symptom or symptomatic, Arash could use some negative adjectives before “culture” to show that this aspect of culture is not welcome.
Line 1: consider sth sth (omit as)
Last line: Commonly we say, sb’s life is sacred.
Thank you very much.
You’re most welcome.
Topic for Presentation:
Branding
1) Why do people have tendency for purchasing special brands?
2) How can we make a brand famous?
3) What do people feel when they are wearing expensive clothes?
It’s so interesting.
Certainly.
Such a hot topic, thanks.
Today, prohibition against blood sports is a heated argument. Some want to enjoy their time, no matter how awful animals are treated. However, I personally believe that these sorts of sports should be omitted, undoubtedly.
To begin with, all creatures have the right to live freely without any harassment. To be more specific, world belongs to all humans, animals, plants, etc. and if human beings are more intelligent, it does not mean that humans can restrict others. So, blood sports are out of the question.
In line 2, is the use of the word awful correct? we need an adverb here after how. Awful can be used both as adverb and adjective but I guess its adverb meaning is not suitable here.
You are right.
Sasan means Treat sb badly. So, awfully is better.
Usually ‘awful’ as an adverb is located before an adjective, e.g., awful awkward.
Line 2: treat sb/animal + adverb :arrow: awfully, although ‘awful’ is both an adjective and an adverb.
Line 3: omit, better to say, banned, forbidden, prohibited
Line 5: The world belongs …
Last line: humans :arrow: they (use a pronoun)
Please compose your paragraphs faster.