IELTS Writing Task 1 | Commuting to Work

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Commuting

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Commuting

Instructions:

The two pie charts above show the reasons for which people go to work by bicycle or by car. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points. You could make comparisons when necessary.

LELB Student: Arash

The first pie chart demonstrates the reasons why some people prefer to cycle to work. Conversely, the second pie chart illustrates the reasons for those who choose to go to work by car.

30% of commuters who prefer cycling say that this is because riding a bicycle to work is healthier than driving. The same amount of people, 30% say that they cycle to work because it causes less pollution than driving. In addition, 13% of people them prefer to cycle to work because of its low price in comparison to driving. Surprisingly, a similar amount of people said that they cycled to work because it is faster than traveling by car.

The majority of people who prefer to travel by car say it is more comfortable than cycling. The two least significant reasons for going to work by car, with 14% and 11% sequentially, is that people need to carry things to work and that it is safer than cycling to work.

To conclude, we can obviously see that the majority of people who cycle to work do this for health and environmental reasons. On the other hand, those who travel by car want to have a more comfortable journey.

✅ Examiner’s Notes:

• Paragraph 1:
  • Line 1: the reasons for which / why some commuters choose to
• Paragraph 2:
  • Line 1: The verb “say” is not that professional. You could use: “believe, claim, state, think, etc.”.
  • A similar proportion of the cyclists, that is, 30% of the population, …
  • 13% of people them prefer ??? I didn’t get this part.
  • low price :arrow: lower cost
    • You should use a comparative adjective.
  • Line 3: A mismatch between the tenses: “say” and “said”
• Paragraph 3:
  • Line 2: “is that” :arrow: are that
  • Sequentially :arrow: respectively
• Paragraph 4:
  • Last line: “journey” is not a good word here.
• Chart Analysis:
  • The first paragraph is curt and to the point. You did it right.
  • Paragraph 2, Last line: the use of “surprisingly” and making that comparison were so appropriate.
  • You could specifically refer to the most significant reason for preferring driving to cycling (i.e., 40%), which is the largest percentage of the other reasons in both of the pie charts.
  • The two factors of safety and the possibility of carrying things were precisely equally important for the drivers, yet not so relatively significant in comparison to the comfort factor.
• Choice of Words (Diction): Rather simplistic. You should use more academic words.
• Coherence: Good
• Cohesion: Great
• Grammar: Above average
• Reasoning: Good
• Word Count: “201” Great!