Private Vehicles IELTS Writing Task 2
To what extent do you agree with this point of view? Bring reasons to support your claim.
LELB Society’s Essayist: Sasan
These days, big cities suffer from heavy traffic and some people believe that imposing a higher tax on private vehicles mitigates traffic congestion. However, this methodology is at odds with my viewpoints which are going to be discussed in this essay.
Raising tax on personal vehicles is not an appropriate solution even though it may work for a period of time. In fact, the first step for finding a judicious solution for alleviating traffic jam is clarifying the reasons behind the heavy traffic. For instance, it is mostly reported that heavy traffic occurs in crowded cities. So, the solution is((should be / turns out to be / could be / can be, because you’re trying to come to a conclusion based on your previous claims.)) making the balance between the populations((population)) of different cities in order to decrease the traffic jam. So, the authorities need to create the same welfare((provide the same welfare)), including job vacancies, infrastructure, etc., in various cities in order to equalize the dwellers of cities. Moreover, putting up the tax injures people satisfaction((people’s satisfaction)) which deteriorates the relationship between the government and ordinary people. So, it is not laudable to impose higher tax on personal vehicles so as to overcome the traffic jam.
Furthermore, it is not fair to change a rule in a country whose crowded cities are dealing with traffic jam. In other words, in many cases, some specific cities in a country are coping with bumper-to-bumper traffic. So, if the government impose higher tax on personal vehicles some, people who((some people, who)) live in the country have to pay more tax because in crowded cities people are dealing with traffic congestion.
In conclusion, increasing tax on personal vehicles is not a suitable method for controlling traffic jam and there are better solutions such as decreasing the population in crowded cities in order to solve this problem.
- Coherence: Excellent!
- Cohesion: Great!
- Grammar: Really good!
- Reasoning: Great!
- Essay Analysis: Inclusive and exclusive! Perfect.
- Word Count: “282” Excellent