IELTS Writing Task 1 Body Weight and BMI

IELTS Writing Task 1 Body Weight

IELTS Writing Task 1 Body Weight

Instructions:

/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data adopted from https://www.ielts-exam.net/

The graphs below summarize the weight measurements of people living in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

LELB Society’s Student: Sasan

The graphs cast light on the percentages of people categorized into((categorized according to / categorized as)) four groups according to their weights in Charlestown in 1995 and 2015.

Overall, what stands out from the graphs is that in 2015, more people were coping with obesity compared to 1995.

Paying attention to the year 1995, people who were ideal in terms of weight((people whose body weights were ideal)) constituted more than 50 percent of the population. To be more elaborate, in the 20-29 age bracket, almost 70 percent of people were ideal((had ideal body weights)) but it decreased approximately to 50 percent in the 60-69 age group. Moreover, only were the minority of people obese, most of whom were living in the sixth decade of their life. Furthermore, underweight dwellers made up 30 percent of people in the 20-29 age bracket and it fell slightly among middle aged((middle-aged)) people and rose gradually when it came to the oldest people. Also, making up almost 20 percent of people in the 30-49 age group, overweight people were not((the proportion of overweight people was not)) tangible among other groups of people.

Turning to the year 2015, the older people were, the more obese they became((this part is grammatically incorrect.)). In fact, 60 percent of people aged 60-69 years were obese as opposed to the 20-29 age bracket in which the rate of obesity was next to zero. What is more, almost 70 percent of the youngest group were ideal((had ideal body weights)), however it declined to 5 percent among the oldest group. Interestingly, underweight people were mostly included in the two latter groups, making up less than 20 percent of people in their own groups((That is not correct.)). Last but not least, overweight people had considerable numbers in the 30-49 and 60-69 age group((groups)),((no comma is required)) accounting for,((no comma required)) roughly,((no comma is required)) 20 percent of people in their own groups.

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Examiner’s Notes:

Visual Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>Data Analysis:
- At first glace, it becomes clear that unlike the year of 2015, in 1955, a high percentage of people across the five age brackets, to be more precise, approximately 70%, had ideal body weights. Surprisingly, in this year, none of the people in the third and forth decades of their lives were obese. Conversely, the rate of obesity followed a growing trend across the age brackets consecutively in 2015.
Choice of Words (Diction): Great!
Coherence: Excellent
Cohesion: Above average
Grammar: Good
Reasoning: Good; however, you could write between the lines and come to some further conclusions.
Word Count: “282” You have used too many words in your report. It should contain around 150 words.

General Information

You have 20 minutes for this task.
Your summary should consist of at least 150 words.
The
IELTS
The International English Language Testing System or IELTS /ˈaɪ.ɛlts/, is an international standardized test of English language proficiency for non-native English language speakers. It is jointly managed by the British Council, IDP: IELTS Australia and Cambridge English Language Assessment, and was established in 1989. IELTS is one of the major English-language tests in the world, others being the TOEFL, TOEIC and OPI/OPIc.
IELTS Academic and IELTS General Training are designed to cover the full range of ability from non-user to expert user. The Academic version is for test takers who want to study at tertiary level in an English-speaking country or seek professional registration. The General Training version is for test takers who want to work, train, study at a secondary school or migrate to an English-speaking country.
“>IELTS Writing Task 1 is an information transfer task, which requires you to write an accurate account of some information presented in graphic form, For example (adv)
used before mentioning a specific thing, person, place, etc. in order to explain what you mean or to support an argument:
Many countries, for example, Mexico and Japan, have a lot of earthquakes.“>for example, a graph, table, or some form of a pictorial representation of Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data.
Your addressee is a university lecturer.
It is important to read the instructions closely to specify the main focus of your report.

Planning Your Task

Make sure to spend around 2 to 3 minutes planning and organizing your answer. That is to say, do NOT start writing immediately. During this pre-writing time, try to analyze the delineated Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data carefully.
In the exam, you can write notes on the illustration and in a clearly defined space on the front of your answer paper.
Your notes could be in abbreviated forms In order to (conj)
with the purpose of doing something:
Michael trained every day in order to improve his performance.“>in order to save time. Remember that your notes are personal and won’t be assessed.
During planning, decide which significant details will be discussed to reflect the task requirements. For example (adv)
used before mentioning a specific thing, person, place, etc. in order to explain what you mean or to support an argument:
Many countries, for example, Mexico and Japan, have a lot of earthquakes.“>For example:
- The apex (high points) or base (low points)
- Steady pace or rate of changes
- Fluctuation in the rate of changes
While planning your task, you should determine the time period So that (Conjunction)
With the intention of, in order to:
I studied so hard so that I could pass the exam.“>so that the correct tense is used.

How to Start Writing?

It is recommended that you start your
IELTS
The International English Language Testing System or IELTS /ˈaɪ.ɛlts/, is an international standardized test of English language proficiency for non-native English language speakers. It is jointly managed by the British Council, IDP: IELTS Australia and Cambridge English Language Assessment, and was established in 1989. IELTS is one of the major English-language tests in the world, others being the TOEFL, TOEIC and OPI/OPIc.
IELTS Academic and IELTS General Training are designed to cover the full range of ability from non-user to expert user. The Academic version is for test takers who want to study at tertiary level in an English-speaking country or seek professional registration. The General Training version is for test takers who want to work, train, study at a secondary school or migrate to an English-speaking country.
“>IELTS Writing Task 1 with a restatement of the keywords in the instructions. In so doing, you will give a brief description of the details in the pictorial form.
You should write one clear sentence to introduce the illustration.
After your general description, you should write one or two sentences to indicate the relationships between the Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data or demonstrate a trend.
Write more sentences to Provide: Verb
/prəˈvaɪd/
verb [T]
to give someone something that they need:
This booklet provides useful information about local services.
All meals are provided throughout the course.
The author provides no documentary references to support her assertions.
“>provide a more in-depth account of the Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data that transcends your general statement.

How to Analyze the Graph?

In your second paragraph, you should give a detailed account of the visual Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data reflected in the graph or chart.
Do not try to describe the graph in a linear or sequential order. Instead, you must develop a nonlinear and profound understanding of the Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data.

Providing an Overview

Since the Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data with a pictorial form are not accessible to your addressee, who is a university lecturer, you Ought to: Modal Verb
/ɔːt/ US /ɑːt/ used to express something that you expect will happen: They ought to have arrived at lunchtime but the flight was delayed.“>ought to Provide: Verb
/prəˈvaɪd/
verb [T]
to give someone something that they need:
This booklet provides useful information about local services.
All meals are provided throughout the course.
The author provides no documentary references to support her assertions.“>provide a brief overview of the general trends and patterns to make sense of the whole Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.
“>data. Remember that IELTS Writing Task 1 is NOT an essay. Instead, it’s just a summary of some visual Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data. Accordingly, the existence of a conclusion is not necessary; However (Adv & Conjunction)
/ˌhaʊˈev.əʳ/ US /-ɚ/ (Conjunction) despite this: This is one possible solution to the problem. However, there are others. (adverb) in whatever way: However you look at it, it’s still a mess.“>however, it is strongly recommended to give an overall overview of the Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data.

Important Tips

You can write your summary Either: Determiner / Conjunction
/ˈaɪ.ðəʳ/ /ˈiː-/ US /-ðɚ/
determiner
both:
Unfortunately I was sitting at the table with smokers on either side of me.
either (CHOICE) /ˈaɪ.ðəʳ/ /ˈiː-/ US /-ðɚ/
determiner, pronoun, conjunction
used when referring to a choice between two possibilities:
Either candidate would be ideal for the job.
"Do you prefer pork or beef?" "I don’t like either."
"Would you like the metal or plastic one?" "Either will do."
You can get there by train or bus – either way/in either case it’ll take an hour.
We can either eat now or after the show – it’s up to you.
Either you leave now or I call the police!
either (ALSO) /ˈaɪ.ðəʳ/ /ˈiː-/ US /-ðɚ/
adverb
used in negative sentences instead of ‘also’ or ‘too’:
I don’t eat meat and my husband doesn’t either.
"I’ve never been to the States." "I haven’t either."
They do really good food at that restaurant and it’s not very expensive either.“>either in British or American English style, but you need to be consistent throughout your summary.
As it is Typical: Adjective
/ˈtɪp.ɪ.kəl/ adjective
1. showing all the characteristics that you would usually expect from a particular group of things:
I must look like the typical tourist with my shorts and my camera.
2. DISAPPROVING showing all the bad characteristics that you expect from someone or something, often in a way that is annoying:
It’s just typical of Ian to spend all that money on the equipment and then lose interest half way through the course.
“>typical of any writing task, it is strongly recommended that you proofread your own report for Possible: Adjective
/ˈpɒs.ə.bļ/ US /ˈpɑː.sə-/
adjective [+ (that)]
that might or might not happen:
It’s possible (that) Mira might turn up tonight.
"Do you think he’ll end up in prison?" "It’s very possible."
That’s one possible solution to the problem.“>possible mistakes.

Recognizing Similarities and Differences

Mention the actual Data: Noun
/ˈdeɪ.tə/ US /-ţə/
group noun [U]
information, especially facts or numbers, collected for examination and consideration and used to help decision-making, or information in an electronic form that can be stored and processed by a computer:
The data was/were collected by various researchers.“>data (numbers, percentages, dates, units, etc.) in your comparison as long as the statistics are in line with the point you are trying to make.

Verbs to Describe the Data

Decline ⬇
Decrease: Verb
/dɪˈkriːs/ US /ˈdiː.kriːs/
verb [I or T]
to become less, or to make something become less:
Our share of the market has decreased sharply this year.
We have decreased our involvement in children’s books.
decrease /ˈdiː.kriːs/
noun [C or U]
There has been a steady decrease in the number of visitors.
I haven’t noticed much decrease in interest.“>Decrease ⬇
Fall ⬇
Grow ⬆
Increase ⬆
Plummet ⬇
Rise ⬆

Intensifiers to Describe the Data

Considerably
Dramatically
Gradually
In the same way (making comparisons)
Moderately
Noticeably
Rapidly
Similarly (making comparisons)
Sharply
Slightly
Slowly
Steadily

Another Dominant Structure

There	Article	Adjective	Descriptive Noun	Prepositional Phrase (in what)
There is There was There has been There will be	a(n)	ascending considerable descending downward dramatic gradual insignificant moderate noticeable Rapid: Adjective /ˈræp.ɪd/ adjective fast or sudden: The 1990s were a period of rapid change/growth. I was startled by a rapid movement to my left. His response to the accusation was rapid.“>rapid sharp significant slight slow steady upward	decline Decrease: Verb /dɪˈkriːs/ US /ˈdiː.kriːs/ verb [I or T] to become less, or to make something become less: Our share of the market has decreased sharply this year. We have decreased our involvement in children’s books. decrease /ˈdiː.kriːs/ noun [C or U] There has been a steady decrease in the number of visitors. I haven’t noticed much decrease in interest.“>decrease drop fall fluctuation grow increase rise trend	in something

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1 thought on “IELTS Writing Task 1 Body Weight and BMI”

Sasan
March 27, 2018 at 4:00 am
The graphs cast light on the percentages of people categorized into four groups according to their weights in Charlestown in 1995 and 2015.
Overall, what stands out from the graphs is that in 2015, more people were coping with obesity compared to 1995.
Paying attention to the year 1995, people who were ideal in terms of weight constituted more than 50 percent of the population. To be more elaborate, in the 20-29 age bracket, almost 70 percent of people were ideal but it decreased approximately to 50 percent in the 60-69 age group. Moreover, only were the minority of people obese, most of whom were living in the sixth decade of their life. Furthermore, underweight dwellers made up 30 percent of people in the 20-29 age bracket and it fell slightly among middle aged people and rose gradually when it came to the oldest people. Also, making up almost 20 percent of people in the 30-49 age group, overweight people were not tangible among other groups of people.
Turning to the year 2015, the older people were, the more obese they became. In fact, 60 percent of people aged 60-69 years were obese as opposed to the 20-29 age bracket in which the rate of obesity was next to zero. What is more, almost 70 percent of the youngest group were ideal, however it declined to 5 percent among the oldest group. Interestingly, underweight people were mostly included in the two latter groups, making up less than 20 percent of people in their own groups. Last but not least, overweight people had considerable numbers in the 30-49 and 60-69 age group, accounting for, roughly, 20 percent of people in their own groups.
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IELTS Writing Task 1 Body Weight and BMI