IELTS Writing Task 1 | Immigration Issues

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Immigration Issues

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Immigration Issues

Instructions

The table, graph or bar chart above shows the emigration rate from the UK to other 5 countries from 2004 to 2007.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information delineated in the graph.

General Information

• You have 20 minutes for this task.
• Your essay should consist of at least 150 words.
• The IELTS Writing Task 1 is an information transfer task, which requires you to write an accurate account of some information presented in graphic form, for example, a graph, table, or some form of a pictorial representation of data.
• Your addressee is a university lecturer.
• It is important to read the instructions closely to specify the main focus of your report.

Planning Your Task

• Make sure to spend around 3 to 5 minutes planning and organizing your answer. That is to say, do NOT start writing immediately. During this pre-writing time, try to analyze the delineated data carefully.
• In the exam, you can write notes on the illustration and in a clearly defined space on the front of your answer paper.
• Your notes could be in abbreviated forms in order to save time. Remember that your notes are personal and won’t be assessed.
• During planning, decide which significant details will be discussed to reflect the task requirements.
• While planning your task, you should determine the time period so that the correct tense is used.

How to Start Writing?

• It is recommended that you start your IELTS Writing Task 1 with a restatement of the keywords in the instructions. In so doing, you will give a broad overview of the details in the pictorial form.
• You should write one clear sentence to introduce the illustration.
• After your general introduction, you should write one or two sentences to indicate the relationships between the data or demonstrate a trend.
• Write more sentences to provide a more in-depth account of the data that transcends your general statement.

How to Analyze the Graph?

• Do not try to describe the graph in a linear or sequential order. Instead, you must develop a nonlinear and profound understanding of the data.

Concluding Paragraph

• Since the data with a pictorial form are not accessible to your addressee, who is a university lecturer, you ought to come to a conclusion to make sense of the whole data. In your concluding paragraph, you can use the notes you took while analyzing and organizing the data in your pre-writing activity lasting for 3 to 5 minutes.
• You should write one sentence to conclude your writing.

Important Tips

• As it is typical of any writing task, it is strongly recommended that you proofread your own report for possible mistakes.

Verbs to Describe the Data

1. Decline ⬇️
2. Decrease ⬇️
3. Fall ⬇️
4. Grow ⬆️
5. Increase ⬆️
6. Rise ⬆️

Intensifiers to Describe the Data

1. Dramatically
2. Gradually
3. Moderately
4. Rapidly
5. Sharply
6. Slightly
7. Slowly
8. Steadily

Another Dominant Structure

Essayist: Arash

The bar chart above demonstrates the emigration rate from the United Kingdom to other 5 countries from 2004 to 2007. There has generally been a small decrease in the number of immigrants during this period, except Australia and France which had a significant growth from 2004 to 2006. The bar chart also shows that Australia and Spain have far more immigrants in comparison to other countries.

In 2006, Spain had approximately 32 thousand immigrants from the UK. The only country with a greater number of immigrants at the same time was Australia, with around 51 thousands immigrants. Both countries saw a decrease in the number of immigrants in 2007. In New Zealand, the figure fell slightly over the four years, from 24 thousand in 2004 and 20 thousand in 2007.

It is clear that the number of immigrants in the USA fluctuates wildly during this period. The general trend, therefore, was that the proportion of immigrants had a considerable reduction from 2006 to 2007.

✅ Examiner’s Notes:

• Paragraph 1:
  • Line 3: Australia and Spain have :arrow: … had
    • Use simple past tense.
  • Lines 3-4: in comparison to other countries :arrow: … to the other countries
    • The other countries are known to us. So, use the article ‘the’.
• Paragraph 2:
  • Line 2: 51 thousands immigrants :arrow: 51 thousand immigrants
  • Line 2: Both countries saw a decrease :arrow: … experienced / underwent a decrease in …
  • Line 3: … the figure fell slightly :arrow: the number of immigrants fell down / dropped …
  • Line 3: … from 24 thousand in 2004 and 20 thousand in 2007 :arrow: from sth to sth
• Paragraph 3:
  • Last Line: had a considerable reduction :arrow: … experienced a considerable decline
• Chart Analysis:
  • You started your report brilliantly by providing an overview of the entire chart.
  • Your analysis is genuinely deep and accurate.
• Choice of Words (Diction): Needs improvement
• Coherence: Good
• Cohesion: Average
  • You need to use more conjunctions among the sentences.
• Grammar: Good
• Reasoning: Great!
• Word Count: “164” Great!