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The bar chart above displays the population of seals, whales, and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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IELTS Writing Task 1 essay on marine life
This graph portrays the population of three marine creatures: (whales, dolphins, and seals) from the years 2008 to 2016 by Gormez Strait.
- for graph = show, display, demonstrate (more preferable)
- between 2006 and 2018
- in the Gormez Straits
As it is evident, the dolphin population had an upswing growth over these 8 years. Moreover, it has the highest population in 2018 among the other two marine animals (whales and seals).
- upswing is a noun.
- 12 years (2006 to 2018)
The seal’s population growth situation is not quite like the dolphin’s population. In the years 2006 to 2010, the seal’s population had a regressive growth. Nevertheless, its population ascended in the following years.
- seals’ population vs. seal’s population
- dolphins’ (population can be omitted to avoid repetition)
- regressive growth = regressive step / direction / orientation
The whale’s population was moderately the same between these years. Fortunately, their numbers increased in the last years (from 2014 to 2018). In addition, whales had the lowest population in 2018.
- Whales’ population
Overall, the upward population statistics of these three marine animals (whales, dolphins, and seals) demonstrate that people and governments have taken the marine animal community and their life status more seriously. Consequently, their population ascended with better and conscientious protection.
- upward trend / rising population (without statistics)
- animal community = animal welfare
- living conditions / habitat
- the government (singular word with a plural verb)
- population grew / increased / rose / soared (common collocations for population)
Analysis and scoring
- Analysis
- You’ve used some inaccurate collocations.
- Cohesion and coherence: 20 of 25%
- Grammatical range and accuracy: 17 of 25%
- Lexical resources: 15 of 25%
- Task achievement: 17 of 25%
- Spelling: Good
- Punctuation: Fair
- Word Count: “158 Words” – You could use more words, around 170 words is ideal.
- Time on Report Writing: “ 20 Minutes” – Excellent
- Band score: 6 of 9
time spent on writing: 20 minutes
Thanks for mentioning the time spent on this report.
This graph portrays the population of three marine creatures: (whales, dolphins, and seals) from the years 2008 to 2016 by Gormez Strait.
As it is evident, the dolphin population had an upswing growth over these 8 years. Moreover, it has the highest population in 2018 among the other two marine animals (whales and seals).
The seal’s population growth situation is not quite like the dolphin’s population. In the years 2006 to 2010, the seal’s population had a regressive growth. Nevertheless, its population ascended in the following years.
The whale’s population was moderately the same between these years. Fortunately, their numbers increased in the last years (from 2014 to 2018). In addition, whales had the lowest population in 2018.
Overall, the upward population statistics of these three marine animals (whales, dolphins, and seals) demonstrate that people and governments have taken the marine animal community and their life status more seriously. Consequently, their population ascended with better and conscientious protection.
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