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The maps above show the changes in the town of Springer from 1970 to the present time. Summarize the information and changes by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when necessary.
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IELTS Writing Task 1 on Analyzing Maps of Springer Town
This picture illustrates the map of Springer town in the year 1970 and our current time. In the year 1970, the city included just two houses, one shop, a farmland, and two enormous jungle areas. At present time a few more shops (five more), a school, an airport, and six apartments are built in the town.
- This map shows / illustrates Springer town … Do not change the wording of the instruction = “The maps above show the …”
- and the current time
- the city = the town (Towns and cities are not the same.)
- included = had – The verb ‘include’ is not collocationally a proper verb here. You could write: There were / existed merely 2 houses in the town.
- It’s better to use a conjunction to show contrast before ‘at present time’ like however, in comparison, etc.
- have been built / exist / can be seen (present perfect tense vs. simple present tense)
With the additional numbers of apartments and one reduction of houses between this time gap in Springer City, we can say that the population has greatly increased. The existence of an airport also explains that the percentage of travel and transportation between foreigners and locals has sharply risen. Moreover, there was not a school in 1970, unlike the current time. That means the knowledge of the importance of education has fortunately increased among people.
- additional number of
- Better to write “any school”
- better to write: citizens, residents or town dwellers, instead of people
Furthermore, the vastness of forests has bitterly decreased. Also, the expansion of the farmland has extremely lessened. And with the additional numbers of shops and apartments, we can come to the conclusion that Springe town has transformed from a rural area to an urban one.
- Such a very logical conclusion!
Analysis and scoring
- Analysis
- A noticeable improvement in using conjunctions and intensifiers has been made.
- Cohesion and coherence: 22 of 25%
- Grammatical range and accuracy: 19 of 25%
- Lexical resources: 20 of 25%
- Task achievement: 22 of 25%
- Spelling: Great
- Punctuation: Good
- Word Count: “179 Words” – Excellent
- Time on Report Writing: “20 Minutes” – Great
- Band score: 8 of 9
Time spent on writing: 20 minutes.
Thank you for mentioning the spent time.
This picture illustrates the map of Springer town in the year 1970 and our current time. In the year 1970, the city included just two houses, one shop, a farmland, and two enormous jungle areas. At present time a few more shops (five more), a school, an airport, and six apartments are built in the town.
With the additional numbers of apartments and one reduction of houses between this time gap in Springer City, we can say that the population has greatly increased. The existence of an airport also explains that the percentage of travel and transportation between foreigners and locals has sharply risen. Moreover, there was not a school in 1970, unlike the current time. That means the knowledge of the importance of education has fortunately increased among people.
Furthermore, the vastness of forests has bitterly decreased. Also, the expansion of the farmland has extremely lessened. And with the additional numbers of shops and apartments, we can come to the conclusion that Springe town has transformed from a rural area to an urban one.
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