IELTS Writing Task 1 | Pollution Levels

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Pollution Levels

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Pollution Levels

Instructions:

The graph above shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. prospect in 2025.

Outline the information shown in the graph by selecting and reporting the main features. You can also make comparisons if necessary.

LELB Student: Sasan

The given graph demonstrates how the densities of Sulphur dioxide and smoke changed in London from 1600 to 2000. Overall, the densities of these gases were on the rise til 1870 approximately, but they dwindled in the rest of the time span.

Elaborating on the details, in 1600, the density of Sulphur dioxide was about 250 micro grams per cubic meter, whereas that of smoke was almost 50 micro grams per cubic meter. Moreover, with the passage of time, the aforementioned densities rose gradually and the difference between the densities of these two materials grew until 1970 at which they hit their pinnacles, reaching 900 and 400 micro grams per cubic meter respectively. It should be noted that the density changes of Sulphur dioxide was more unstable compared to that of smoke in this period of time. Afterwards, they both plummeted turbulently and reached zero roughly, in 2000.

Examiner’s Notes:

• Paragraph 1:
  • Line 2: til :arrow: “till”. It’s better to use “until” because “till” is informal.
  • Line 2: It’s better to place “approximately” right before the value or statistics it tries to explain.
• Paragraph 2:
  • Line 3: It’s better to use “substance” for “materials” because “materials” are referred to only solid substances, whereas you are referring to gases, here.
  • Line 3: … until 1970 at which :arrow: … in which
  • Line 3: “pinnacle” with the meaning of “crowning achievement” is uncountable.
  • Line 4: Better to use “density fluctuation” instead of “density changes”
  • Line 4: You should not capitalize “sulfur dioxide” in the running text.
  • Last line: roughly zero
• Chart Analysis:
  • Your first paragraph sounds like an overview that should be placed at the end of the report. In the first paragraph, you should give a very brief description of the variables reflected in the instructions.
  • They did NOT reach their pinnacle in 1970. It was around 1900.
  • In the middle of the twentieth century, the density of smoke was subject to considerable fluctuation.
• Choice of Words (Diction): You need to use more technical intensifiers and adverbs to specify the values.
• Coherence: Great!
• Cohesion: Good
• Grammar: Great!
• Reasoning: Fair
• Word Count: “148” Your report should include at least 150 words.