IELTS Writing Task 1 Public Library
IELTS Writing Task 1 Public Library
Instructions
Visual Data
The graph above shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
Write a summary of the information given in the graph by selecting and reporting the main points. You could make comparisons when necessary.
LELB Society’s Student: Sasan
The graph depicts the number of books read by both genders at Burnaby public library from 2011 to 2014.
In 2011, women were more active than men in terms of reading books, reading almost 5000 books which was 2000 more than the number of books read by men. Fortunately, with the passage of time, reading books came to vogue more tangibly among both genders. However, the women’s growth in reading books was faster than men’s from 2011 to 2012. Surprisingly, the men’s rate of reading books soared faster than women’s from 2012 to 2013 in which the number of books read by women reached its apex (about 11000). In fact, in 2013, the number of books read by men commenced to outstrip that of women. In the last year, women lost their thirst for reading books and finally, the number of books read by them reached 9000, approximately. Nevertheless, in the last year, men were more preoccupied with reading books compared to women and they read 15000 books in 2014, roughly.
Examiner’s Notes:
- Paragraph 1: Excellent
- Paragraph 2:
- Line 4: commence outstripping
- commence + gerund
- Line 5: In the last year :arrow: In 2014 / by 2014
- It’s better to be more specific.
- Line 5: the number of books read by them reached 9000 :arrow: the number of books read by them dropped to 9000
- The verb “reach” shows an increase. You should use a verb to indicate a decrease.
- Line 6: in the last year :arrow: in the same year / by the same year
- It’s better not to repeat “in the last year”. You have used it in the previous sentence.
- Line 4: commence outstripping
- Visual Data Analysis:
- Choice of Words (Diction): Fair!
- Coherence: Good
- Cohesion: Needs improvement
- Grammar: Good
- Reasoning: Good
- Word Count: “171” Great!
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Great to hear that. Good luck!
The graph depicts the number of books read by both genders at Burnaby public library from 2011 to 2014.
In 2011, women were more active than men in terms of reading books, reading almost 5000 books which was 2000 more than the number of books read by men. Fortunately, with the passage of time, reading books came to vogue more tangibly among both genders. However, the women’s growth in reading books was faster than men’s from 2011 to 2012. Surprisingly, the men’s rate of reading books soared faster than women’s from 2012 to 2013 in which the number of books read by women reached its apex (about 11000). In fact, in 2013, the number of books read by men commenced to outstrip that of women. In the last year, women lost their thirst for reading books and finally, the number of books read by them reached 9000, approximately. Nevertheless, in the last year, men were more preoccupied with reading books compared to women and they read 15000 books in 2014, roughly.
Dear Sasan,
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