IELTS Writing Task 1 Air Travel in New York

IELTS Writing Task 1 Air Travel

IELTS Writing Task 1 Air Travel

Instructions

Visual data

The chart above shows the number of air travelers using three international airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000. Write a summary of the information given in the chart by selecting and reporting the main points. You could make comparisons when necessary.

LELB Student: Sasan

The chart demonstrates the number of people who used three different international airports, namely Kennedy, LaGuardia and Newark in New York from 1995 to 2000.

To be more specific, in 1995, LaGuardia was the most favorable airport which had 35 million passengers and the number of its travelers increased steadily and reached its pinnacle in 2000, having 67 million passengers. Also, in 1995, Newark had the lowest number of passengers, at 15 million, and with the passage of time, the number of its travelers went up and reached its apex in 1998, but in the two further years the number of its passengers hovered around 42 million persons. Paying attention to Kennedy airport, in 1995, it ranked second in terms of the number of travelers, at 25 million, and the number of its travelers grew until 1997, at 47 million. Afterwards, the number of travelers in Kennedy decreased in 1998 and 1999 and jumped to 67 million people in 2000.

✅ Examiner’s Notes:

• Paragraph 1: Perfect!
• Paragraph 2:
  • Lines 1 & 2: It’s better to omit the second “and” before “reach” and reword the sentence in this way: … increased steadily, reaching its pinnacle in 2000 with approximately 67 million passengers.
  • Line 3: at 15 million :arrow: roughly 15 million
    • You should omit “at”.
  • Line 3: and with the passage of time :arrow: but / yet / notwithstanding
    • You are trying to show contrast, not addition, although your following sentence, too, indicates another contrast.
  • Line 4: In the two further years :arrow: in the following two years
  • Line 4: 42 million persons :arrow: … people
    • You can also omit “people”, simply 42 million.
  • Line 4: Paying attention to Kennedy Airport :arrow: regarding / concerning / with regard to / in regard to …
  • Last line: in Kennedy :arrow: at Kennedy Airport
  • Last line: The number of travelers at Kennedy Airport reached approximately 44 million in 2000 (not 67 million).
• Visual Data: Analysis:
  • One blatant / flagrant mistake in interpreting the data in the last line!!
  • Among the three airports, Laguardia was the only one which experienced an upward trend steadily in the number of passengers, roughly doubling its customers within six years.
• Choice of Words (Diction): Good
• Coherence: Above average
• Cohesion: Needs improvement
• Grammar: Above average, needing improvement
• Reasoning: Great
• Word Count: “160” Great!