IELTS Writing Task 1 | Leisure Time

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Leisure Time

IELTS Writing Task 1 | Leisure Time

?Instructions:

The table, graph or bar chart below shows the number of hours of leisure time during a week enjoyed by males and females across various employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information delineated in the graph.

General Information

• You have 20 minutes for this task.
• Your essay should consist of at least 150 words.
• Your addressee is a university lecturer.
• It is important to read the instructions closely to specify the main focus of your report.
• In the exam, you can write notes on the illustration and in a clearly defined space on the front of your answer paper.
• Your notes could be in abbreviated forms in order to save time. Remember that your notes are personal and won’t be assessed.
• During planning, decide which significant details will be discussed to reflect the task requirements.
• While planning your task, you should determine the time period so that the correct tense is used.

Intensifiers to Describe the Data

1. Dramatically
2. Gradually
3. Moderately
4. Rapidly
5. Sharply
6. Slightly
7. Slowly
8. Steadily

Another Dominant Structure

Essayist: Arash

The bar chart demonstrates the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by males and females in a typical week according to gender and employment status.

Among those employed full-time, men on average had forty-five hours of leisure, whereas women had approximately thirty-seven hours. In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure time showed an increase for both sexes, as might have been expected. Here also men enjoyed more leisure time over eighty hours, compared with seventy hours for women, perhaps reflecting the fact that women spend more time working in the home than men. There were no figures given for males part-time workers, however, females part-time had forty hours of leisure time, only slightly more than females in full-time employment.

Lastly, housewives enjoyed fifty hours of leisure, on average. Overall, the chart illustrates that in the categories for which statistics on males leisure time were available, men enjoyed at least ten hours of extra leisure time.

✅ Examiner’s Notes:

• Paragraph 1
• Paragraph 2:
  • Line 1: 45 hours of leisure :arrow: 45 hours of leisure time
    • You have made the same mistake in a couple of other cases.
  • Line 2: for both sexes :arrow: in both sexes
  • Line 2: It’s better to replace “here” with “in the same categories/groups”.
  • Line 3: working in the home: working at home
  • Line 4: males part-time workers :arrow: male / female part-time workers
    • In these sentences, “males and females” are adjectives, and they cannot be pluralized.
• Chart Analysis:
  • In Paragraph 4, you have referred to the amount of leisure time in housewives, which is not a conclusion, but an obvious and precise fact.
  • You have not used intensifiers adequately. For example, you could use “precisely/exactly” to refer to the amount of leisure time enjoyed by housewives.
  • Although you have made some inferences based on the data, you could still go into more details to interpret the data.
  • You did not mention that it is surprising that male part-time workers did not have any leisure time at all.
• Choice of Words (Diction): You need to use more formal words.
• Coherence: Good.
• Cohesion: Average
• Grammar: Needs improvement
• Reasoning: Good, but you should make more inferences.
• Word Count: “156” Good