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Essay Writing on Fame and Honor with Correction

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Essay Writing on Fame

Essay Writing on Fame

Essay Question

Are honors more likely to come to those who seek them or those who don’t care about fame and think only of their work? How much do fame and accomplishment impress you? Does just knowing you’ve accomplished something worthwhile mean as much to you as getting attention and praise for the accomplishment?

Essayist 1

Honors or fame goes those who seek for it, fame or accomplishment impresses me in a way that, you become popular and you always have an access for different opportunities because people they take you as an important person then they accommodate you for different positions than unknown person but you should not praise your accomplishment because it will make you to look down others and treat them as useless.

Corrections:
1. goes those –> goes to those
2. seek for –> seek
3. have an access for –> have access to
4. accommodate you for different positions –> … offer you / provide you with different positions
5. make you to look down others –> make you look down on others

Essayist 2

I personally don’t care much about becoming famous. I’ve seen many celebrities and prominent people leading miserable lives. I should admit that it depends on someone’s personality whether to treasure fame or not. I believe fame should be internally praised. That is, if you make sure that you are a famous person from inside, then you don’t need to advertise it. This nice feeling is engendered, for sure, through gaining bona fide accomplishments. I mean you should feel that you truly deserve that sense of self-esteem and respect.

Essayist 3

It is true that there are many approaches to obtain honour, however , in my opinion , most moral values can only be achieved through hard work and determination.
This is especially true for long term relationship as most are wise enough to disregard power hungry individuals.
Success and fame are social constructions/ status respective to a certain goal. Therefore, they might be too ambiguous to be defined, and consequently I am rather indifferent to those societal attachments .
Personal achievement is rewarding regardless of whether I receive praise for my progress or not. On the other hand , it’s never harmful to be reminded of your own success , which greatly encourages most people to aim higher for their next objective .

Corrections:
1. approaches to obtaining (gerund)
2. Attach the punctuation marks to the end of the words without any space. For example, however , –> however,
3. long term –> long-term

Essay writing on fame


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